我觉得还可以,但是缺点是太对应,而且用词不简练,你设想下面是一个英国诗人写的,你觉得他写的怎么样,是不是用词有点怪呢.
我要是写就这样写:
Dancing on knifepoints
heaviness or lightness
from sole into my heart
the pain overspreading always
我觉得还可以,但是缺点是太对应,而且用词不简练,你设想下面是一个英国诗人写的,你觉得他写的怎么样,是不是用词有点怪呢.
我要是写就这样写:
Dancing on knifepoints
heaviness or lightness
from sole into my heart
the pain overspreading always