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  • my favorite star

    Do you know Wu Zun?He is my favorite star,and his english name is Chun Wu.

    of course,Chun is very handsome,and i can say he is more pretty than (the)other actors.But it's not the most important reason.

    Many people think that Chun's just an actor,but who knows the story of(behind) him?

    Chun is successful because of his hard-working.After Chun finished his study,he became a model to make money.Athough his family is rich,he didn't use his parents' money.(he didn't ask their parents for money)Then he had his own company.And he became the youngest entrepreneur in Brunei.He's a star in the business.Now,he becomes an actor.He's also a star in Entertainment.

    Chun said,he has a very difficult time before(加上being) famous,but he didn't give up.

    After(改为since) i knew the things about Chun,he has been a star in my eyes.the star is bright in my road,and i'll follow the star forever to make my own dream come ture.