几篇自己写的英语作文请大家指教.

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  • 1 there was a earth quake in Sichuan

    改为:A earth quake happened in Sichuan

    Many children lost theis father or mother

    改为:A lot of children lost their parents

    A great number of school are also caved in

    “好多”是复数,schools 还有过去时are-were

    If you donate your love I think

    改为I think If you donate your love 我觉得更通顺,你随便

    2 你的连词不必总是Next 像 then 就可以

    3 Moet -most

    request:请求 用在这里不太合适换成make,make sb do ,你把to去掉

    “agreat number of student”,student+s

    systerm用在这里不太合适换成:rule,规章制度

    Ithink school should change the systerm.Then students must like their school better.

    改为Ithink if the school changeS the rule the students will be happier

    可能还有不足,不过希望我能帮到你!