1,第二行的 win 改为 won,这是过去的新闻,应该要用过去式.所以换成won.
2,Everyone has dreams of riches 应该改成 Everyone has dreams of being rich.
3,there are three means for accessing to wealth 中的 accessing 建议改为 approach.
4,even if they can enjoy a few years 这里应该换成 enjoy a few years’life.
5,sanctioned according to law 中的 according to 应该改为 By law.
6,one of the largest and most common way 中的 largest 应该换为 efficient 比较好,用largest 用词不当
修改完毕,请您查阅.
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