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What i see form(拼写错误） the picture is that i think that it is worry of longer pencil laugh at shorter pencil,because it is obvious that shorter pencil used to have been used by someone,so,he must have made some works,it is these works that he reflects his value from.
这句太长了,你语法不是很好的时候尽量别用长句.
what I see from the picture is 和I think that作用一样,不需要重复
it is worry of longer pencil用法不对,要么去掉要么句子要重新写.
shorter pencil可以断句了
(the) shorter pencil
has been used by someone (其余的都多余,重复了）
because和so只用一个,不能两个都用在一个句子里,另外so后面不加逗号
works后面断句
I think it is these
去掉he
去掉from
However longer pencil have not done some works.
have应该是has,另外这句话应该是 However the longer pencil has not done any work yet.
So i hope that he should be hard to learn experience from shorter pencil than to laugh at shorter pencil
I hope改成I think
hard to learn experience from shorter pencil than to laugh at shorter pencil改成learning hard from the experience of the shorter pencil rather than to laugh at the shorter pencil.
15分满分的话,如果是小学作文我会给12.如果是初中大概9-11分,分年级以及进度不同.如果是高中那么5-8分左右吧.
按照后面的评分标准大概10左右