I feel really interested in your position of secretary. Majoring in business administration,I am confident, hard-working, with a pleasant personality and part-time job experience. Now as my resume following, it will be honored to hear from you soon.
英文中的顺序我做了调整,比较符合规范和英语阅读习惯.建议你的中文版把自我介绍放在一起,不要先说一句自己的专业,又说一句求什么职,然后又说一句自己的性格,再来一句有经验.应该先表明求职意向,然后简短介绍,然后引出简历并表达敬意.