My school
Beijing University of Aeronautics & Astronautics, the place where the final segment of my education journey takes place.
Started in 1952, it had been among the first batch of top sixteen universities in China. In the period of sixty years' time, our school's core competition and international influence have risen significantly. Currently placed at the ninth place in the university ranking, in China our school is still pushing and encouraging us to strive for the best.
Despite being the place which nurtured many leaders and prominent people of talents, my school, our entire big family still remains humble despite being elated at the excellence results.
I certainly would show gratitude and devotion to my school after I fully become a person of use and ambition, for I know that without my school, there will never be the achievements that I will achieve later on in life.
146字,对不起有点超了,可以自己选着删一些.前面都是百度百科上关于你学校的成就,后面那一段是我编的,说得是你们的学校虽然取得很好成绩,出过许多人才,却依然十分谦虚.最后一句是说的你以后不会忘记你学校对你的好,并且一定会知恩图报的.
语法应该没问题. :)