Along with the high-speed development of computer science and the internet
那个“the"的地方不对,因为computer science不是一样东西,但是internet是
online chatting has become an important method
chatting online是动词,所以不能变成一个方式,但是online chatting是名词,可以.然后,along with.的发展,...has become,不是has been
Comparing with e-mails and phone calls,
The subject under discussion adopts the method of software project management
在software project前面不用the,但是后面应该加个management吧?我对电脑不熟,但是知道software project management是一个短语
紧接着的那个comprehensive要小写,designing techniques (复式),network technology前面不用the,但是需要逗号
,comprehensive use of designing techniques,and network technology
The project uses(复数) Visual C++ 6.0 as development tools (不需要the)