November 10th sunday snowy
Today was sunday.In the morning,(这里逗号)
I ate breakfast and (如果是改错别字就不用加and了)
I did(have done也可以) my homework .
In the afternoon,(这里也是)
I had a math class.I got home(会不会令误会呢 got back to 或是 came行吗?)
at half past four(这里错了 你想指几多点...是14:30吗?这样就half past two)
Then I played with my friend(要加s吗?)
and played computer (games?) at six o'clock/6pm
In the evening I ate dinner with my family.(这里的句号到那里了00?)
Then,I went for (a) walk.
(I had to do homework but I thought it was very boring.)
第二篇
If I had a million (没有of)dollars
If I had a million(一样) dollars.
I would do many things.
Firstly,(逗号啦) I would deposit (我们不用put的,但可以用save) some money in the bank(错字).
I would buy a big house for my family (by using the rest of money)
Secondly行吗?,I would travel around the world.
Thirdly行吗?,
I would buy a lot of boks (because) I like reading (and) I think reading is important.
Finally,(逗号00)I would (donate)我们不用GIVE的 some money to charity.
如果你想可以加It is because I want to help other people.
(What would you do if you had a million dollars?)这个通顺一点
好啦,提醒一句其实上网也有很多类似的作文 用英文搜寻就行了