76分 评语： 文章学术词汇使用熟练,词汇表达较为丰富；衔接词和过渡词用的很不错；句法知识掌握不错,但文中从句数量偏少. 第一句.From the line graph , we can see clearly that the acid
levels in mouth after eating three different kinds of sugar or honey each 5
minutes .[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查![句子错误] 语法错误,建议将three different
kinds改为three
kinds.[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[搭配统计] 动名搭配 eat...kind 在教材中出现过 77 次 SeeAlso: eat
variety86,feed
kind20,eat sort12,consume
kind10,eat form4,use_up
kind4,exhaust
kind3 [学习提示] 易混词汇: different, various,
diverse 均含“不同的”之意.第二句.As can be seen from the graph that the honey had the
smallest impact to tooth . [名词错误] to tooth 冠词缺失[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[低频警示] smallest...impact 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] the smallest impact to tooth 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语 第三句.At the beginning , the honey's level of PH fell dramatically
from 7 at first to about 4.7 5 minutes later . [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[学习提示] 易混词汇: collapse, fall 都含有“倒塌”之意.第四句.Then the level had remained the same for another 5 minutes ,
since then it took 15 minutes back to 7. [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[学习提示] 易混词汇: remain, linger, stay
均有“停留,逗留”之意. 第五句.According to the chart honey had approximately 10 minutes
under acid level which tooth decay occurs. [低频警示] acid level which tooth decay 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语 [低频警示] the chart honey 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语 [学习提示] 易混词汇: agree, accord,
coincide, conform, correspond 均含“符合,一致”之意. agree:
侧重指经过比较后的所有主要部分均和谐一致,无冲突和矛盾.
accord:
着重指性格、精神、语气或质量等方面的完全一致.
coincide:
多用于指观点、判断、愿望、利益或兴趣的一致或相符.偶尔用于人,强调意见或观点完全相同.
conform:
强调在形状、性格以及主要特点等方面的相似或一致.
correspond:
指在进行比较时,两个事物在某一个重要方面或细节上互相匹配、一致.[批改提示] 注意approximately与roughly的区别.[批改提示] according
to在做“根据”讲时,近义表达有in accordance with.我也是在读雅思的 而且8月24号就要考了 以上的批改是我在英语网里找的 要网址的话私信我就OK求最佳哦亲